Forgotten

VULGER · Nov 29, 2005, 12:50 PM

Forgotten

Amidst the world you are one among countless.

Washed away in a sea of remorse which remains boundless?

Wounds run deep into the flesh with precise skill.

The poetic flame shadows this bending will.

Flowing ashes of amber burning bright;

Darkened rooms struggle to find light.

There the sinners lay baring inevitable fate.

Suffer their souls rotting in crates.

Necks twisting in pain, eyes covered and sewn;

Identities stripped, mercy made unknown.

No one really lives, but no on truly dies.

Eternally they stretch out for their own demise.

Forever lying conscious under the midnight sun.

Alone for all time; remaining one among none.

___________

Falstaff · Nov 29, 2005, 06:00 PM

this is good, did you write this?

VULGER · Nov 29, 2005, 06:44 PM

Yes if you would like me to post more than I would love the feeback. I have about 60+ pieces of work, three short stories, and a book I have been working on for about 4 years now! I will post anothter one. Thanks for the reply!

VULGER

Falstaff · Nov 29, 2005, 08:31 PM

go for it...
this forum never really gets a great deal of attention, I will grant that, but I enjoy a good work of prose or wit or compelling writing, its a lost form IMO..

Nov 29, 2005, 12:50 PM	#1
VULGER DriverHeaven Newbie Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 9 Rep Power: 0	Forgotten Forgotten Amidst the world you are one among countless. Washed away in a sea of remorse which remains boundless? Wounds run deep into the flesh with precise skill. The poetic flame shadows this bending will. Flowing ashes of amber burning bright; Darkened rooms struggle to find light. There the sinners lay baring inevitable fate. Suffer their souls rotting in crates. Necks twisting in pain, eyes covered and sewn; Identities stripped, mercy made unknown. No one really lives, but no on truly dies. Eternally they stretch out for their own demise. Forever lying conscious under the midnight sun. Alone for all time; remaining one among none. ___________ __________________

Nov 29, 2005, 06:00 PM	#2
Falstaff Old Codger Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: USAFA Posts: 18,139 Rep Power: 131	this is good, did you write this? __________________ The tallest blade of grass is the first to be cut by the scythe.

Nov 29, 2005, 06:44 PM	#3
VULGER DriverHeaven Newbie Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 9 Rep Power: 0	Yes if you would like me to post more than I would love the feeback. I have about 60+ pieces of work, three short stories, and a book I have been working on for about 4 years now! I will post anothter one. Thanks for the reply! VULGER __________________

Nov 29, 2005, 08:31 PM	#4
Falstaff Old Codger Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: USAFA Posts: 18,139 Rep Power: 131	go for it... this forum never really gets a great deal of attention, I will grant that, but I enjoy a good work of prose or wit or compelling writing, its a lost form IMO.. __________________ The tallest blade of grass is the first to be cut by the scythe.